Posted by Michele Peters on May 12, 19102 at 10:28:19:
In Reply to: no.13 posted by jack on May 11, 19102 at 14:35:20:
Good job.
Some comments:
The word following "Firstly, Secondly", etc. should not be capitalized. Only the first word in each sentence should be capitalized. Since you are using "Firstly" and "Secondly", your third point should start with "Thirdly". Using "Finally" for your last point is good.
Spell out 4 (four)
Replace "it" with eating at home to help the reader clarify what "it" is.
Good summary.