Posted by Michele Peters on September 22, 19102 at 14:17:58:
In Reply to: Topic178: The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer. posted by ppmonkey on September 17, 19102 at 09:38:12:
Good effort. You may want to provide additional examples to further support your predicted changes.
Some comments:
You should not number you paragraghs.
: 2.Firstly, people will have better treatments in this new century will be better.
Firstly, people will have better treatments in this new century.
OR
Firstly, treatments in this new century will be better.
Others, and always most people, could
The majority of people ...
In future, I believe, serious
In the future,
In future, not only my hometown, but
In the future,
also all over the world will be far away from gray sky, annoying noise and effluvial waters.
...everywhere in the world..
Restate your three changes in your conclusion...better medical treatments, a healthier environment, and world peace.