Posted by Michele Peters on September 29, 19102 at 11:21:05:
In Reply to: Dr Mr Lougheed! Can you give the comments on my essay: Give reasons for the change that you find the most important one in the 20th century posted by smiling sun on August 24, 19102 at 01:02:51:
Your essay is well structured and thought out, and shows a good command of English.
Restate your three reasons in the last (conclusion) paragraph.
Some other comments:
: There were many important changes in the 20th century. But that one stood out of the rest was the development of Internet technology.
Many important changes took place in the 20th century, but the development of Internet technology stands out from the rest.
have become more easier.
have become easier.
: Internet is like a large library from which people can access and exploit any information they needed.
...they need.
: Internet is a fast and economical mean of communication.
...and an economical means...
To make payment, they use e-bank’s
...make a payment..